In your current syntactical setup, the anastrophic prepositional dangling at the front of your second sentence perhaps could be salvageable. Nevertheless, moving the comma would be the sound grammatical thing to due because of the resultant pure compound-compound division: without the second comma you have a lack of parallel constructions in your use of a present participle and the main clause is appended to it awkwardly.
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Date: 2004-01-07 01:59 am (UTC)*Everything
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